Wednesday, October 14, 2015

And the Burned Moths Remain, by Benjanun Sriduangkaew, January 14, 2015; 6,275 words
Rating: 1, Needs improvement

Jingfei fights copies of herself for eternity--while other copies watch--but she does get the occasionally interruption.

Mini-Review (click to view--possible spoilers)

The narration is almost entirely exposition, even for emotions. The dialogue is wooden.

Lots of errors (or apparent errors) break suspension of disbelief. For example, Jingei has her aorta in her throat. The prose is too purple, both in narration and dialogue. For example, "Beneath the carapace of their armor, under the brocade of their robes, perhaps their hearts heave to the same beat."

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