★☆☆☆☆ Needs Improvement
(Colony SF) The war divides the GreenScallion colonists into opposing camps, but the irregularity of food deliveries makes the diet monotonous—unless someone is willing to break the rules and trade. (7,386 words; Time: 24m)
"The Peppers of GreenScallion," by Myung-Hoon Bae [bio] and Jihyun Park (translated by Gord Sellar, edited by Neil Clarke), appeared in Clarkesworld issue 153, published on June 1, 2019.
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Review: 2019.332 (A Word for Authors)
Pro: It certainly has a nice message about cooperation and the foolishness of war.
Con: The writing is just subpar, and the translation is shoddy, producing awkward and even broken English all over the place. The dialogue is consistently unnatural, and quite a lot is told by the narrator that would be better shown in the actions of the characters (or not said at all).
In particular, the interactions between the two teens isn’t hard to believe in concept, but the way it’s written, I had trouble believing it at all.
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Pro: It certainly has a nice message about cooperation and the foolishness of war.
Con: The writing is just subpar, and the translation is shoddy, producing awkward and even broken English all over the place. The dialogue is consistently unnatural, and quite a lot is told by the narrator that would be better shown in the actions of the characters (or not said at all).
In particular, the interactions between the two teens isn’t hard to believe in concept, but the way it’s written, I had trouble believing it at all.
Other Reviews: Search Web
Myung-Hoon Bae Info: Interviews, Websites, ISFDB, FreeSFOnline
Jihyun Park Info: Interviews, Websites, ISFDB, FreeSFOnline
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