★☆☆☆☆ Needs Improvement
(Fantasy Adventure) Three travelers fleeing across the desert find safety with a caravan, but only as long as they can hide the fact that the Guild has put a price on their heads. (7,690 words; Time: 25m)
This story is clearly a fragment of a longer work; it does not stand on its own.
"A Fool's Baneful Gallantry," by Derek Lubangakene [bio] (edited by Jason Sizemore), appeared in Apex Magazine issue 119, published on April 2, 2019.
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Review: 2019.205 (A Word for Authors)
Pro: The alternate-reality Saharan African setting is rich and interesting.
The fight scenes add lots of tension and excitement.
Con: This story just isn’t polished enough; it's as though we're looking at the first draft, unedited. There are grammar errors and typos all through it, and there are all sorts of inconsistencies. For example, we’re told the three had been walking for thirty days, but then we learn that Adzala only met them twelve nights previous.
On top of that, it feels like the first few pages and the last few pages are missing. We're never quite sure what's happening nor do we find out what happens.
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Pro: The alternate-reality Saharan African setting is rich and interesting.
The fight scenes add lots of tension and excitement.
Con: This story just isn’t polished enough; it's as though we're looking at the first draft, unedited. There are grammar errors and typos all through it, and there are all sorts of inconsistencies. For example, we’re told the three had been walking for thirty days, but then we learn that Adzala only met them twelve nights previous.
On top of that, it feels like the first few pages and the last few pages are missing. We're never quite sure what's happening nor do we find out what happens.
Other Reviews: Search Web
Derek Lubangakene Info: Interviews, Websites, ISFDB, FreeSFOnline
Follow RSR on Twitter, Facebook, RSS, or E-mail.
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