Thursday, November 24, 2016

The Wreck at Goat's Head, by Alexandra Manglis

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(Fantasy Time Travel) A Greek free diver finds an ancient shipwreck where there was nothing at all just days earlier. (5,844 words; Time: 19m)

Rating: ★☆☆☆☆ Needs Improvement

"," by (edited by Niall Harrison), appeared in issue 11/14/16, published on .

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Pro: It's touching that Sana gets to talk to her mother one last time.

It has some great sentences in it. "And then the sound of her heart beating inside her would remind her it was time to surface, and she would feel the slight throbbing of her body asking to live, and reluctantly, made aware again of her natural place above water, she would rise."

Con: The biggest problem is with the writing itself. The story is mostly info dumps, which is bad enough, but it also it suffers from intrusive narration, POV shifts, purple prose, and even some awkward syntax, such as "She felt dazed, incredulous, here in the harshness of direct sunlight, of what she had just witnessed."

For all the details about diving, there are some factual errors. For example, she wasn't at risk for bends. Not with just three dives.

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