Wednesday, January 27, 2016

First Kill, by Jennifer Fallon cover image
(High Fantasy) To complete his apprenticeship in the Assasins Guild, Kiam Miar must prove himself. Oddly, his target is a prostitute, but how hard could that be? (7,247 words)

Rating: 1, Needs improvement

"First Kill," by (edited by Claire Eddy) was published by , .

Mini-Review (click to view--possible spoilers)

Pro: The world is interesting, the setup is good, and the protagonist's actions are mostly believable.

Con: The narration is awkward (the author manages to both show and tell), and the dialogue is very unnatural in lots of places. Not everywhere--there are long sections that read nicely--but enough.

The conclusion is a let down. After that clever setup, he solves everything by killing an old woman. How could he know that the girl's soul wasn't inside the old crone and that he wasn't killing her by mistake? It felt like he didn't deserve to succeed.

1 comment (may contain spoilers):

  1. The solution felt off to me too. At first I thought this might be a series to check out, but I think I'll pass.